What do you think about this poem?

Personally I love your form. I'm a poet and I love the short thought writing you have here. I will tell you what my professor told me. Every poem is like someones soul on paper. I totally agree. I like to wrap my poetry back to the first few lines--it helps end the thought in an organized way. Your use of alteration (consonant sounds that are the same) is fantastic. Remember, poetry was made to read aloud; make it sound like music-read it out loud to yourself. If your happy that's all that matters.